First Draft Introduction

Everyday most people including me and you do SNS. They upload their picture when they travel, when they change their hair style and want to show it to others, when they see attractive something and want to share it. Also, they meet their old friends by expanding their SNS friends. They share their feeling, information with others by SNS. However, we usually forget how powerful SNS is because we are too used to SNS to realize its power. Now, I want to ask one question to you. Is SNS one of tools that marketers should consider? The answer can be various according to readers. However, my answer to this question is "yes". Since we consider the situation the influence of SNS becomes more and more powerful,during marketing, SNS is a tool that marketers should consider.

1. Attention grabber -

I attracted the audience by showing the audience that how we are used to SNS. Then I pointed out something most of them forget - how powerful and popular SNS is and how important the SNS is to marketing.

2. Explains the topic -

In the attention grabber, I introduce all the elements of my topic : SNS, marketing, and their relation.


3. My thesis -

It is very simple and direct argument. I thought the argument "To be a successful marketer, one should know SNS" not seemed like essay argument. I changed it to a better argument, during marketing, SNS is a tool that marketers should consider.