Peer Review (1)

5 points

• Technically perfect

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays an interesting and unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Thought provoking and captivating

• Clearly the product of extensive drafting and research

4 points

• Technically perfect

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Clearly the product of thorough drafting and research

3 points

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Some evidence of drafting and research

2 points

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

0 points

• Incomplete or inadequate

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?

4 points. It is very good essay but it isn't attractive enough to catch the readers' interest.
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How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

Make the supporting reasons more intersting.
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Thesis
What is the thesis?

SNS election campaign should be allowed   . ..............................................................................................

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes.

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If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?


I would write the thesis in the same way. It is very simple and good to introduce writer's main thought.
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Any other thoughts?

No.

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Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?


Yes, I can.
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Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 

It isn't interesting enough to catch the reader's attention, but it comfortably lead to the thesis.
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Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
.Yes.


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Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes.
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Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?


Yes. She catches what refutation she will receive and refutes it well.
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Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 

Yes.
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What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

Add other reasons to support which are very unique and interesting.
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Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 

I agreed.
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When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

I agreed
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If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?

I'm not changed.
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How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?

Add some interesting statistics or perspective.
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Research
Is the author using research effectively? 

Yes.
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Is the research from appropriate sources?

Almost yes. But one research's origin is missing.
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Are the sources obvious?

Yes, it's reliable.
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Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?

Yes.
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Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?

No, they are already enough to support the claims.