Peer Review (2)

5 points

• Technically perfect

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays an interesting and unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Thought provoking and captivating

• Clearly the product of extensive drafting and research

4 points

• Technically perfect

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Clearly the product of thorough drafting and research

3 points

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Some evidence of drafting and research

2 points

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

0 points

• Incomplete or inadequate

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?

5 points. I think there is no defect.
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How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

5 points is full score, so this essay doesn't have to do other thing.
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Thesis
What is the thesis?

But compared to the growing prejudice that cartoons are harmful to young children, cartoons are not detrimental to the developing brains of children.
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Is the thesis clear and debatable?

Yes.
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If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?


Cartoons are worth enough to children and they are good to develop brains of children.
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Any other thoughts?

No.
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Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?


Yes.
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Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 

Yes. Intro is very interesting.
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Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

Yes.
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Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

Yes.
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Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Yes.
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Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
Yes.
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What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
Nothing. I think it is almost perfect.
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Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 

I agred.
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When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

I agred.
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If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?

I'm not changed.
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How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
Find other reasons which are unique and hard to refute.
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Research
Is the author using research effectively?
Yes.
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Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes.
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Are the sources obvious?
Yes.
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Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Yes.
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Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
No.